Yeah, its not telling quite clearly which exact 2 characters its supposed to compare and contrat. Its telling that they embody the values of a romance hero but not comparing or telling which 1 is better at emboying their own society's values.
Yeah Jimmy, you might want to make the thesis more clear on which characters you are comparing and contrasting. Some people might get confused by your wording.
You might want to make it clear on which two you're contrasting. I mean, you can tell it's supposed to be Lancelot and Arthur but you have to think about it which you shouldn't have to do.
I am confused by the thesis. Are you going to contrast Arthur and Lancelot?
ReplyDeleteYeah, its not telling quite clearly which exact 2 characters its supposed to compare and contrat. Its telling that they embody the values of a romance hero but not comparing or telling which 1 is better at emboying their own society's values.
ReplyDelete*contrast spelled it wrong srry.
ReplyDeleteYeah Jimmy, you might want to make the thesis more clear on which characters you are comparing and contrasting. Some people might get confused by your wording.
ReplyDeleteYou might want to make it clear on which two you're contrasting. I mean, you can tell it's supposed to be Lancelot and Arthur but you have to think about it which you shouldn't have to do.
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